Every Second Counts Review

Story Title: Every Second Counts

Author: appleMIN

Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/everysecond_AS/

Status: Completed/ one-shot

Reviewer: m_girl07

*Note: The reviewer has nothing against the writer and does not mean to be harsh in any way*

Title: 4/5

-Your title does relate to your story, especially the quote that you put at the end. The title is also interesting but I think it’s been used quite a bit.

Forewords: 9/10

-You had a great foreword; there was part of the one-shot, the introduction and a little author’s note=).

First Impression: 10/10

-When I first clicked on your story, I thought it was a very organized and I loved the colour of the font with the background; it wasn’t too hard on the eyes and I was able to just keep reading=p. I also loved your poster because it’s so pretty and it fit the mood of your story as well.

Plot/Story line: 13/15

-The plot was very straightforward and simple but at the same time, it was nicely thought out and had a lot of description so I was able to feel the mood you were trying to portray.

Flow: 5/5

-You had amazing flow and I think it’s one of the best I’ve seen so far. You didn’t leave any information out and things didn’t jump from one end to the other.

Creativity/Originality: 7/10

-The idea of it itself isn’t something that hasn’t been used many times but the way you wrote it was refreshing. When you think of the word “accident”, the first thing that would pop into your mind would be a car accident.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 15/15

-Your spelling and grammar is great! You used the right words to describe situations and you didn’t spell anything wrong. And, you know how to use a semi-colon properly=D! There is only one thing I noticed and it was this:

“It was neither happy nor sad smile…” (Chapter 1)

-Just add a “a” after “nor”.

Writing Style: 10/10

-I love your writing style because like I said before, I love the descriptions you use and you have a way with words=p.

Characterization: 8/10

-It’s a one-shot so you didn’t really get time to develop the characters but I knew what they were like even so. Hebe was the gentle one who was always optimistic while Arron is, you could say, her opposite=).

Communication with Readers: 3/5

-I only saw a few author’s notes after your foreword but in those one’s, you were very friendly and welcoming. You even recommended one to your readers=p.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5

-I liked your story, I finished it without stopping=D. The look of it, the way it’s written as well as the characters!

Subtotal: 89/100

Bonus: 5/5

-I’m not going to repeat everything I just said up there^ but know that you deserved it=).

Total: 94/100