July 26th Review

Title: July 26th

Author: Star-chan

Status: Completed

Reviewer: precious_star32 @ Untouchable Desires

Title: 5/5

The title fits your story well. It makes the readers think why is your title July 26?

Forewords: 9/10

I really like how you write your forewords. When I first read your forewords, I know that your story is really nice.

First Impression: 9/10

The poster is atrractive as well as the background. It matches your story. The title of your story makes the readers really curious. I like the title. My first impression on your story was, I started to question myself. Why is it July 26. So when I started reading it until the end, I finally got my answer.

Plot/Storyline: 13/15

Your story is quite unique. Although at first I was quite bored but your story is nice.

Flow: 5/5

The flow of your story is just right. So no problem with that.

Creativity/Originality: 10/10

Since your story is based on a true story, i consider this original.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 12/15

You made a few mistakes though. Like you started with the conjunction "but".

You wrote: We were the same age and in the same class. But I still saw her from time to time.

It should be: We were the same age and in the same class, but I still saw her from time to time.

It would have been better if you wrote it this way...

You wrote: We went our separate ways, you walking your own path. I was walking mine.

It should be: We went our separate ways, your walking on your own path and I was walking mine.

You wrote: "See? This is why you don’t go to the toilets alone." She had warned me.

It should be: "See? This is why you shouldn't go to the toilets alone." She had warned me.

The rest its all good..

Writing Style: 9/10

I love how you wrote the story. Its very nice.

Characterization: 8/10

I was sort of confuse, because i don't know which girl your talking about. You should have gave them names or make it specifically.

Communication With Readers: 5/5

The communication here is strong. The way you write your story just make me feel the story. So good job!

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5

I enjoyed reading your story although i prefer love/romance story better, but overall its great!

Bonus: +5

Total: 94/100