Not Enough Love Review

Story Title: Not Enough Love
Author: 'Niii
Link: http://winglin.net/fanfic/not_enough/
Status: complete
Reviewer: Darkess

*My reviews are not meant to harm or discourage the author, but to help them fix their stories and do better in the future. The opinions expressed in this review are mine and mine alone, and are not meant to offend you*

Title: 3/5

.. I feel stupid for saying this, but I ... don't get it o.o what does the title have to do with the story? Not Enough Love in the world could have saved poor Taemin? But there obviously was enough love since he saved her, even after death... I don't know. it just didn't make sense to me.

Forewords: 10/10

Excerpts out of your story really add to the forewords here ^^ It gives interesting little teasers that pull the reader in and make them wonder the context in which the quotes came.

First Impression: 10/10

Taemin's concentrated face made me want to read this quickly. The deep blue informed me that it would be a sad story, and I love reading those types of stories. I was happy because the text wasn't distracting, and neither was the background. Also, the quote is very deceiving. At first I thought that they would break up with each other, but nope ^^

Plot/Story line: 9/15

I thought it was very predictable from the beginning and the guardian angel promise. As soon as he said that I was like "... -.- he's going to die, isn't he" . But you kept the story going and you kept it interesting. I thought that the ending was humorous, how the doctors didn't' believe in guardian angels. I think that you should maybe try to make your writing a little more deceiving so that the readers can't figure out what will happen so early on in the story. This will help keep them interested and will make them want to read more.

Flow: 3/5

The different POVs could be confusing to some readers, so I thought that that was a little distracting and a little bit of a nuisance while reading the story. It took away from the overall picture since you had to stop and figure out whose point of view the story was being told from.

Creativity/Originality: 7/10

I hate to say it, but the whole guardian angel and terminal illness concepts aren't really that... unique. Sure I love how you put it, and how you twisted it a little bit so that she almost died and that he saved her despite the odds, but... idunno. I would try tweaking this overall idea just a little bit more to make it more your own.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 14/15

and a set of constellations shone brightly than all the rest. (forewords)

and a set of constellations shone more brightly than all the rest.

I held on tightly onto you for dear life. (forewords)

not exactly a mistake, but on tightly onto? you should probably remove the first on.

Writing Style: 10/10

Absolutely ADORE your writing talents eunnie. Your word choices flow beautifully and piece together to form a perfectly knitted piece of work. It's hard to find flaws in the way that you write, and I really have to dig deep to find any at all.

Characterization: 9/10

You could have maybe described the character's personalities just a little bit more, but I think that you did an excellent job overall at getting the characters across to the reader to make them and their story seem real.

Communication with Readers: 5/5

^^ apologizing for the "crappy" ending eunnie? Awhh I thought it was absolutely beautiful. Was really cute how he saved her, even though she went through 10 whole bags of blood O.O ANYWAYS. You told the readers what YOU thought of your story, which I thought was really good. ^^

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5

Of course I enjoy all of your stories, but I love your sad endings, and the emotional impact that you always have in all of your one shots. Once I realized that I had a request that was something you had written just SITTING there, waiting to be reviewed, I was shocked. Normally I read things from you right away since I love your writing, but I just kind of... missed this one . sorri eunnie! ANYWAYS. I love the whole guardian angel concept. Like I said before, it isn't really unique, but AYE love it a lot ^^ its very romantic and I'm glad that you were able to intertwine it into your plot.

Subtotal: 85/100

Bonus: 5/5

For being THIS {} close to making me cry again, eunnie.

Total: 90/105