His Drama Queen Juliet Review

Story Title: His Drama Queen Juliet

Author: Ji_Yoon

Link: www.winglin.net/fanfic/Ji_Yoon/

Status: Complete

Reviewer: morning_glory

*Note: This is nothing personal against the characters or the author, I am just reviewing this honestly and doing my best to give you a good critique.*

Title: 3/5 I’m not exactly sure how this title relates to the story, because Juliet, I understand, and Drama, too, but I’m not exactly sure how this title fits with the story.

Forewords: 7/10 The forewords gave a pretty good summary of the story. Also, there was the application. But, I think it would have been better to maybe give a short description of the guys, so the girls might have an idea of how their personality might be.

First Impression: 10/10 The poster is nice, as is the background. It contrasts pretty well with the font, so it makes it stand out. That’s very good. J

Plot/Story line: 15/15 This storyline is pretty interesting, and it didn’t have any parts that didn’t fit or were boring, so great job.

Flow: 3/5 The flow is at a pretty fast pace. Could you maybe slow it down? It seems that in every chapter, a bunch of things were happening, so it was a bit confusing.

Creativity/Originality: 8/10 This storyline I think is pretty common, but the small twist you put in with Key and Ji Yoon made it different. There were also more twists, so that’s good.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 12/15 Some grammar problems. Do you spell check? If you really need help, you can go to season-of-mist.blogspot.com. Your vocabulary and punctuation is fine though.

This sentence in particular doesn’t really make sense:

Every early main characters were introduced in the drama.

Writing Style: 6/10 Your writing style is pretty good. There is a pretty equal balance between dialogue and description. But, your sentences seem a bit crowded, because you also added the Youtube links, and the name of the singles and such. So, maybe you could give them a little bit of space, so that the readers can easily see what you wrote.

Characterization: 6/10 I think your other characters could use more characterization, because the only character that I felt you described the most was Ji Yoon, because you brought out her motherly caring nature, as the leader.

Communication with Readers: 5/5 Pretty involved with the readers, because since this is an apply fic, of course.

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5 This story was really interesting, and it was pretty enjoyable, but a bit hard to read, so 4 points. J

Subtotal: 85/100

Bonus: 3/5 For requesting from UD, and for making this a happy ending. Good job, and do your best in all of your stories!

Total: 88/100