Unexpected Attraction [R] Review

Story Title: Unexpected Attraction (Rated)
Author: Buju
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/ua/
Status: On-Going
Reviewer: Linlin Vito

*Note: I may not know the author and vice versa. I am here to review your fan fiction as honest as I can in order for you to improve. Irritating words and eye-sore critics may appear in this; directly or indirectly. But all of that is for no other means, except to aid you in improving yourself. My POV may differ from others. I sincerely apologize if my review contains any offensive comments and criticisms. Thank you. ^^*

Title: 3/5
--> I get the title and I think it fits perfectly with the story. It explains Chun's unexpected attraction to Ella, right? That's what I've understood. Please correct me if I'm wrong. Anyway, good job on writing the title. No mistakes, no typographical errors, so I guess it's a 5! :D

Forewords: 8/10
--> The forewords wasn't that good, but it still contained the main things that a foreword should have. Like for example, the characters, the author's note and a little hint or preview of the story's plot. That characters information wasn't that special, maybe you should add more stuffs about them. But that would reveal the story's plot so maybe it's okay if it stay that way.

First Impression: 9/10
--> My first impressions were both impressed and surprised. Impressed because the poster (and background) fits the title. Suprised because I've never thought that someone would actually write a Rated fanfic about ChunEllaVin. I'm quite a fan about this pairing (ChunElla) and I didn't expect that the youngsters these days will write something unappopriate about them. Anyway, it's still good so don't worry about it. It's just my opinion.

Plot/Story line: 14/15
--> The plot was so good! It's really good to know that there's still writers like you who writes stories like this one. The plot was quite interesting, and it somewhat attracted me and made me read more. So please update soon! :D

Flow: 4/5
--> To be honest, the flow pulled everything away. It's not that you didn't explain Chun's past with Ella, it's just that- I think that it's still lacking something. This explains the deduction on the story line. But I understand because you said that this is just a short story right? Not like the other fanfics which will take 50 chapters to finish.

Creativity/Originality: 8/10
--> This is like the first review I made in Untouchable Desires. You two kinda have the same idea for a story, but you have different versions. In your side, you have the better one! And your story is more interesting than the other fanfics that has the same idea as yours.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 13/15
--> I saw some wrong spellings and some wrong grammars. But it's not that noticeable.

Writing Style: 8/10
--> The way you wrote it was organized and it's easy to read. :D

Characterization: 8/10
--> The characters have their own personalities which is quite different from each other that made them very unique with the others. The introduction here isn't important, but the way the characters react with one another.

Communication with Readers: 4/5
--> The story could easily relate to people who's facing the same problems with the main leads. Well, I think that there's only a few people who have the same problem but that doesn't matter. The way the story progresses just made the readers become interested to read more from you.

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
--> I loved reading your fanfic! JIA YOU! ^^

Subtotal: 93/100

Bonus: 4/5
--> Because THIS STORY ROCKS! (LOL! Hope you're satisfied with that grade.)

Total: 97/100