Reminisce Review

Story Title: Reminisce

Author: Darkess

Link: http://winglin.net/fanfic/DarkessOnes/

Status: One-Shot

Reviewer: Lyselmae Atienza @ Untouchable Desires

*Note: Please DO NOT take my comments seriously. I am here to help you improve, or what not. I have nothing against the author and vice versa. I am here to do my job so please take my comments as something to benefit from, rather than insults. I am a harsh reviewer that may say things that are not pleasing to the author, yet again I am just a reviewer, here to help the author improve their writing skills and intelligence.*

Title: 4/5

Unlike the other reviewers, I liked your title. Your title was plain but had a lot hidden in it. Not only did it fit with the story perfectly, the whole idea of using a title that was unnoticeable and surprising to the readers, was a great choice. Looking and reading the story, it had a good feel into it because the title completed it.

Forewords: 5/10

I wouldn’t say that I was a fan of your forewords. It was missing a lot of elements. I think you shouldn’t lengthen the forewords to give the readers something to look forwards to, something to encourage the readers to support and read your fanfics. Since this is a collection, I decided to give you a passing grade since you were going to have more than one story introduced in the forewords. Besides that, please do lengthen your forewords.

First Impression: 7/10

I liked the poster and organization, but the background seemed out of place… I liked your idea though.

Plot/Story line: 10/15

Your plot managed to amaze me, although the plot is common. I’ve read plots like these before. The thing that amazed me is your detailed and organized flashbacks in the story. Yes, I have read plots like these before, but you added your own originality.

Flow: 3/5

The flow was good for a one shot. Wasn’t too fast or to slow.

Creativity/Originality: 8/10

Like I said, you managed to add your own originality/creativity in the story. The flashbacks were a first for me. This was the first time I read a One-Shot with such organized flashbacks without me getting lost in the story. Good job.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 13/15

You had a great advantage here. I understood everything. You met my standard when it comes to this portion; although, you made a few mistakes. They weren’t big so it wasn’t too noticeable.

Writing Style: 8/10

I liked your writing style. For me, it was easy to read and understand. It looked organized. The chapter had an acceptable length, resulting to good grades. It was clean.

Characterization: 9/10

Being a reviewer, I have no rights in judging your choice of characters. I had no problems with your characterization. I’m not supposed to be picky with characters. It’s basically up to the author themselves to pick their characters. The only thing I ask you to improve on is portraying the personalities of the characters better. Many people have problems with this because sometimes they feel the characteristics they’ll give might be way of topic. But since you are capable of such improvement, I’ll be looking forward to it :)

Communication with Readers: 1/5

You barely had communication with readers. Be sure to improve on that.

Overall Enjoyment: 3/5

I liked your story. Good job.

Subtotal: 71/100

Bonus: 5/5

Sorry for making you wait :S, Good luck! & for the misunderstanding we had with the request, I apologize sincerely.

Total: 76/105