Poise: Prince's Powers Review

Story Title: Poise: Prince’s Powers

Author: MIzconfuz3d

Link: http://winglin.net/fanfic/poise2/

Status: Completed

Reviewer: Lyselmae Atienza @ Untouchable Desires

*Note: Please DO NOT take my comments seriously. I am here to help you improve, or what not. I have nothing against the author and vice versa. I am here to do my job so please take my comments as something to benefit from, rather than insults. I am a harsh reviewer that may say things that are not pleasing to the author, yet again I am just a reviewer, here to help the author improve their writing skills and intelligence.*

Title: 4/5

Honestly, I had no idea what the title meant until I read the story. I liked the title, yet it was a different type of title. It’s composed with different ideas which made the title stand out. The connection between the title and the story itself was indescribably well done.

Forewords: 8/10

Your foreword was good. In the content, you had what was normally placed in the forewords. The only think I’d advice; it’s optional whether you take it as something to benefit you but you might want to add an “About the author” section whereas new readers can know more about you and what else to expect. Also, communicate with the audience more, yet again it’s optional.

First Impression: 9/10

Since you are well experienced, I wasn’t shocked with I had pondered with. Everything was organized, the poster was well done, the font colors were well coordinated, etc. Basically, it had everything I had expected and wanted to see in a fanfic. Great job.

Plot/Story line: 14/15

Your plot/storyline was very unique. I haven’t read such plots before, but in some chapters, there were a few things I was familiar with. But the plot was really a shock. Since I haven’t read the first one to this sequel, I’m missing a lot. I can’t wait for your next fanfics.

Flow: 3/5

The flow was well done and well coordinated. Everything was in place and the timing was great, but in some cases, it seemed to slow done because unnecessary scenes were added. Be sure to watch out for that. Adding details is good, but too much detail create boredom and loss of readers.

Creativity/Originality: 8/10

Well, the plot was original itself. The story was great. Even though the plot was unique already, you added creativity that brightened the story like adding powers that only Yoona had, creating her as the main target, etc. Everything was just beautiful.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 12/15

I guess I wasn’t a big fan of this section in your story. You tend to make mistakes as to mixing up your tenses. In some cases you replaced a word that was supposed to be past tense into present, and vice versa. The only thing I advice you is to ask someone to read your fanfic before posting it up to see if THEY have any opinions concerning this section.

Writing Style: 8/10

I liked your writing style. For me, it was easy to read and understand. It looked organized. The chapter had an acceptable length, resulting to good grades :D

Characterization: 9/10

I had no problems with your characterization. I’m not supposed to be picky with characters. It’s basically up to the author themselves to pick their characters. The only thing I ask you to improve on is portraying the personalities of the characters better. Many people have problems with this because sometimes they feel the characteristics they’ll give might be way of topic. But since you are capable of such improvement, I’ll be looking forward to it :)

Communication with Readers: 3/5

Your communication with readers is rather fluent; could be improved. ;P

Overall Enjoyment: 3/5

I liked your story simply because your plot is great :)

Subtotal: 81/100

Bonus: 3/5

Sorry for making you wait :S, Good luck!

Total: 84/105