Story Title: Checkmate
Author: D14
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/chmate/
Status: On-going
Reviewer: morning_glory
*Note: This in no way is to be taken as an offense against the author or the story. This is an honest review intended for critiquing and helping the story, nothing else.*
Title: 3/5 Not really sure how the title fits with the story yet, but we will see.
Forewords: 10/10 Your forewords were very nice, short and sweet. Oh, but at the beginning, did you mean to say It or If?
If seemed so familiar…
It felt like they were part of my life…
It felt… warm…
First Impression: 10/10 The poster was really dramatic, it really grabbed my attention.
Plot/Story line: 12/15 Your plot is of course vampires. But, it’s different from others I have read, so good job, do your best!
Flow: 5/5 Your speed is pretty good, not too fast. Try to keep it that way. :)
Creativity/Originality: 10/10 Pretty original so far.
Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 12/15 Just a couple, not much. Just double check over it before you submit it.
Writing Style: 10/10 Your writing style is really good, balanced.
Characterization: 10/10 Your characters are really different, I can get a feel for how they’re like almost immediately.
Communication with Readers: 5/5 Very talkative to readers, very nice.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Subtotal: 92/100
Bonus: 3/5 Thanks for requesting at UD!
Oh, and your story has a great beginning, so we await the next chapters!
Total: 95/100
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