Story Title: She’s All That
Author: cutterpillow
Link: www.winglin.net/fanfic/SAT/
Status: Complete
Reviewer: morning_glory
*Note: Please do not get angry about what I write down there. They are just honest critiques, to help you improve.*
Title: 3/5 The title is ok, but I don’t think that it really fits with your story.
Forewords: 10/10 Your forewords were very detailed, nothing to say here.
First Impression: 6/10 The poster and background don’t seem to mesh with the storyline, it doesn’t really flow.
Plot/Story line: 12/15 Your storyline is a bit too common, way over-used. There were a couple twists, such as the attic and the scooter, so that was in your favor. Good job in not lingering on unimportant details.
Flow: 5/5 Your flow was fine, no problems there.
Creativity/Originality: 6/10 Again, not very original.
Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 11/15 You had a couple grammar problems, but overall, I could understand what you meant. But if you want, you could get a beta reader to proofread your story for you, like at season-of-mists.blogspot.com.
Writing Style: 10/10 Your writing style is pretty balanced, descriptive and dialogue. :)
Characterization: 10/10 You did a pretty good job with making their personalities stand out, so that it was plain to readers what they were like.
Communication with Readers: 5/5 You seem to communicate pretty well with readers.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5 This was a nice story. :P
Subtotal: 83/100
Bonus: 3/5 Thank you for requesting at UD! :)
Total: 86/100
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