I Love You Too Review

Story Title: I Love You Too

Author: saranghaeyo

Link: www.winglin.net/fanfic/saranghaeyo_80/

Status: Complete

Reviewer: morning_glory

*Note: This in no way is to be taken as an offense against the author or the story. This is an honest review intended for critiquing and helping the story, nothing else.*

Title: 4/5 Your title didn’t really fit with your story when it started out, but near the end, it all kind of made more sense.

Forewords: 10/10 Your forewords seem interesting, nice description of the characters. Also, you had a great cliffhanger.

First Impression: 10/10 The poster and background were very nicely done, it worked with your story. :)

Plot/Story line: 10/15 Your plot is kind of common, seeing as how the guy already has a girl, then likes the new girl. But, even though it was not that original, I felt that it kept its own flair, that it wasn’t boring, which was good.

Flow: 3/5 It was a bit too fast, like I said, but later it did kind of even out.

Creativity/Originality: 7/10 As I said earlier, it wasn’t very original. But your characters, the way you made them, were pretty creative. :)

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 12/15 There were a couple grammar mistakes, not many spelling.

Ex: You turned around not seeing anything.

Should be: You turned around, but you didn’t see anything.

Just maybe spell check or something. You know, double check. :)

Writing Style: 8/10 You could make your story a bit neater. You write the descriptions and the dialogue right next to each other, and sometimes it makes it look messy.

Characterization: 1010 Your characters were really pretty interesting, good job.

Communication with Readers: 4/5 Your rapport with your readers is pretty good. But you could also respond more on the comments page, too. :)

Overall Enjoyment 5/5 :P Yes, I did enjoy reading this story.

Subtotal: 80/100

Bonus: 3/5 Thank you for requesting at UD. :)

Total: 86/100