Author: Jenn
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/jay_ee_nn_nn/
Status: On-Going
Reviewer: Ms. McFartPants (Linlin Vito)
Note: Author should know that I do not know her and vice versa. Me, the reviewer, have nothing against the author. If you find the comments too harsh or mean, sorry but I'm just doing this to improve your skills for future stories. Thank you for requesting in Untouchable Desires.
Title: 4/5
: The title really fits the plot so perfectly but I think it's a little cliche.
Forewords: 8/10
: The forewords was good; introduction of the story and a little hint of the plot but there's no information about the characters.
First Impression: 7/10
: I wasn't that impressed when I first saw your story. But I did like your poster, everyone looked totally HOT! ^^
Plot/Story line: 13/15
: I love the plot! The thing were the kids get kidnap and the parents get crazy about it and the thing about the school being so secretive is so awesome- but I think it's too common.
Flow: 5/5
: The story's flow was perfect! Not too fast, not too slow..
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
: The idea was cliche, but the way you wrote it and the way you've edited it to make it better and more awesome is too creative!
Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 14/15
: There were some mistakes.. I guess. But it wasn't that noticeable.
Writing Style: 9/10
: Your writing style is absolutely wonderful- but, like what I've said earlier, it's common. But it's all good!
Characterization: 10/10
: I love how the characters interact with the other characters.
Communication with Readers: 5/5
: I just love this fanfic! So good! So creative!
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Subtotal: 87/100
Bonus: 3/5
Total: 90/100
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