H.a.r.a.n.g 하랑 [Love Received from God] Review

Story Title: H.a.r.a.n.g 하랑 [Love Received from God]

Author: baboracoon

Link: www.winglin.net/fanfic/baboraccoon2/

Status: On-going

Reviewer: morning_glory

*Note: This is not personal; anything that I write below is just to help you improve. So please do not get mad because of something that I write.*

Title: 5/5 This title is unique, so it would draw my attention from the list. It fits the story. J

Forewords: 8/10 Your forewords didn’t really make me want to read the story. Make it more, suspenseful, a page-turner, so to speak. Also, you could describe the characters a bit more in detail, not just in the summary.

First Impression: 10/10 The poster and background are really nice, they fit with the story.

Plot/Story line: 12/15 This story could use more detail, description. It’s mostly just actions, and the two characters interacting. You definitely could add more. There were no useless parts that had no place in your story, so great job.

Flow: 4/5 The flow seems to me to be a bit too fast, slow down a touch and you will be fine.

Creativity/Originality: 10/10 This is quite original, so yay!

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 10/15 You STILL have a couple problems, even though a beta reader is helping you. I don’t know, they just miss a couple…

Writing Style: 7/10 Your writing style is neat, but as I mentioned, just add more description of places, people, etc. There needs to be balance. J

Characterization: 7/10 There mostly seems to be an impression of Yoochun, not so much of Changmin. Please describe him more!

Communication with Readers: 5/5 Pretty good, comments and answers at the bottom of the chapter.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5 This was a very nice story, please continue doing your best!

Subtotal: 83/100

Bonus: 5/5 Thank you for requesting at UD, and not taking offense at anything I say. J

Total: 88/100